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I have read your second chapter.
For some reasons I knew that there would be also a Succubus in this story.
Drazzmik motives why the both should have sex were interesting and unexpected.
Also the scenes in the shopping centre where Rick met his former university mates make me smiling.
At the end the arguing between Rick and Alex were overreacted, but considered that they had a busy day it was just to steam up the stress.
The second chapter is even better than the first one.
I'm sure that this Succubus will cause some problems. Somehow I've got the feeling, that she wants to make Drazzmik to her slave.
I wonder if she tries to make Rick mad of her sexual attraction.
Keep up the good work, I am looking forward to the third chapter.
Captain Ash
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