[vadrake]

By making smaller chapters for the minor characters (such as Lulu), you can break up the tension every now and again so that the story can still progress, but you aren't pressured into coming up with these major plot events every few days.

It may just be the fetish in me, but you may want to find a way to sidetrack Link and Midna so that the curse has a chance to drag more people into the story, You can even do a little monster based chapter on something, like a Lizalfos, just to create a short little chapter that can be used to start up anothe chapter.

Also, anytime you are planning to forshadow back to Link and Midna, you should end the chapter with some sort of break, then a small segment from there perspective (such as the curse growing in Lulu next chapter, she screams for some reason, break to Midna and Link, desribing them dashing towards there next objective.)

Likewise, when breaking away from Midna and Link, Midna should usually do some forshadowing that hints as to where the next chapter should be (or even just what it may be about, such as if she says "I hope this doesn't hard too many more people" in the chapter before Lulu would have been cursed. This throws people a nice little bone as to what the next chapter while also keeping the story intact for the next chapter.

Still, TSL, you are an amazing writer, I do come back for the plotline and details you do develop, I'd be amazing to see what you can come up with once you've got all the little literary tricks down.