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Originally Posted by pseudoclever
This is a solid piece with a couple funny beats. The sex scene especially I thought was well-done. Good read.
The one criticism I would offer - it's good to give people who are fans of this sort of thing information about how tall your characters are. But I think you might have over-done it. The constant 4'11", 4'9", 4'6" gets intrusive. Hard numbers associated with heights implies that the characters are carrying around tape measures, heh. Still, I give this a thumbs up.
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Thanks for the tip! You're actually not the only person to have pointed that out to me, so I'm certainly going to keep it in mind on my next story.
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Originally Posted by insomniac
I've seen this on the Unending BE Addventure- sure it's yours?
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Quite sure. I posted it first on there, but once it was finished I decided I liked it enough to compile it and share it.