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Re: Tg Story By Klyphlord
Could have perhaps used another pass to clean up a few typos. Pretty good descriptions of the process, though (especially the clothes).
Just one issue I had with the plot: with the story taking place in the summer after high school, the basketball season would have been over for at least two and a half months (since mid-to-late March), but the dialogue seems to make it sound like Samson's last games were more recent than that.
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