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Re: Trial 63
Well it was well written, and a good read, the thing I didn't like though was no description of the feelings of the change, espicially with the boobs, there was like no utterance of breasts, boobs, or tits at all in the story, but that was it, you have my criticism and that's what you wanted right? To basically improve your writing style by viewing critiques, so with that my duty is done, also again a good read, but you won't have to worry to much about competition on the forum, not many writers, you should see the "Succubuss vows" I think thats the best story I've found on this forum.
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You're Church. The leader, The Boss, The Ass hole.
You have quite a mouth on you and hate everyone on your team...those fucktards. Do you always have to be in charge? I mean come on, you're not always right! Oops...sorry, that was pretty mean..I forgot how much that might come to a shock to you. But at least you usually have good plans. Try being a little nicer to people though.
(Full Name: Private Leonard (L.L.) Church.) (Armor Color: Cobalt.)
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