[darkkol]

Nice story, sorry I didn't realise it till now. I like how the conflict with Mary vs the body is going. It seems to be good mix with Katie helping to keep Mary grounded and thinking straight.

Just reading you story and thinking, the body keeps going on about predators like it once ran into something dangerous or just remembers.

Maybe for the future Mary could run into something that is the Body's natural enemy. Thinking of the Body reminded me of Parasite X from Metroid and how the Metroid were the only thing that could keep them check as they where the only things immune to the Parasite and could eat them.

You could do something like that where the natural enemy to the body is just as bad as the parasite itself.

Just some ideas for you ponder, otherwise great story and I hope you keep writing.