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Originally Posted by Reif
What little fault I could pick at would simply be the rather simplistic and cliche things Billy says. I can't count how many times I've seen the "It's gone!" anvil dropped. Given the character I think an implicit statement would be more powerful and less basic maybe something like "Is this a?! Am I a g..g..?!!"
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Yes you are right I could spice up the dialogue an easy fix.