Re: Under The General's Command (Work in Progress)
Good catch on the billowing ordeal. I fixed it up so it should be clearer now.
I'm afraid I'm going to have to leave you in the dark about Ferris's hair problems. Same goes for whatever it was he was looking for in his pocket. It would spoil the story otherwise.
I can, however, say that this isn't an original universe, and that one of the transformations will be into a character from that universe. There's a secret prize if you or anyone else can guess who before the grand reveal.
Thanks for the feedback by the way! I'm glad you've enjoyed it so far and hope that you'll stick around. The fun is just getting started.
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