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Originally Posted by BillPratt
Not enough grammar in this to be worried about. Seriously, there are two lines of dialogue that the reader would see. The rest is character and staging descriptions.
What I'm interested in is:
Is it fun?
Is it good?
Do the characters and their actions make sense?
Can you visualize the scenes? Are there any areas that need more, less, or better description?
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Not enough grammar? I LAUGH! FOR IT IS ALL GRAMMAR!
But sure, if you like I can take a look at it. My gmail is
jeflint@gmail.com. I'll give it a read and give you my feedback.
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