Just getting around to reading this - it is absolutely fantastic Sphore. Everyone will have different opinions, I for one thoroughly enjoyed it exactly as it was written. I think you crafted four detailed and complete transformations as the members of the family switched roles. Helen's and Jess' actions as their transformations progressed just solidified how all encompassing their changes were. Too often authors describe a character's mental change directly rather than
showing how they have changed through their actions, so I applaud you for not only doing the latter, but doing it so damn well.
Do you have a DA account, or some other location where you have other stories? I definitely want to read more of your work now
All in all, this was a fantastic work and I wouldn't change it one bit
Well done.