[Brad]

I don't usually post on these forums and rather sit back and not open my mouth.

But seeing you as a new member to the forums and asking for feedback I'd just like to say this:
magnus knight is pretty much right on point.

Read some stories, join some groups/sites and go after the "top rated" stories, or see what threads have the most views, you'll start to see that a lot of them have similar themes or items in them.

But most of all, when doing videos you have to show that you're in it too, even if you get just a lil turned on when shooting, it's better than "high-budget" videos where the girls look like cardboard cut-outs. *moans lazily* oh yes oh joy... stomp stomp... me hungry.