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Originally Posted by Lecher
The Morning After
Season 1, Episode 1
“Movie Night”
by Lecher
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The next preview started. An action movie starring Channing Tatum. First a little bit of exposition, then a bunch of explosions and a very shirtless Channing saving some damsel.
The seat next to me creaked a bit.
“Oh…,” Robyn uttered quietly.
“Yeah, I know, beefy” I said, in a slight whisper so as not to disturb the people behind us again.
Another creak from Robyn’s chair.
“Mmm…” It was a breathy sound, a little louder, more high-pitched.
“Okay, relax, you can Google him later,” I whispered.
Another explosion on the screen concealed a louder creak from the chair.
“Oh God,” she said, now in her regular voice.
I finally looked over to her to see her eyes transfixed on the screen at first.
Then she suddenly uncrossed both her legs, putting both feet flat on the floor, and clutched my forearm with her hand.
“Billy…!” she half-screamed in a slightly higher pitch.
She looked straight at me, and with my eyes adjusted to the dim light I could see her pupils were fully dilated, obscuring her brown irises completely. Her nipples were poking through her thin shirt, so erect that I could make out every contour. She was breathing rapidly now. Her palm was moist against my arm, her fingers were locked firmly around my arm. I could definitely tell she was bigger. I could feel her thighs spilling into my seat.
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Lecher,
This alone was the part that sold the build up to the growth, and I wanted to point it out for how effective it seemed to me after reading all of the story up to this point, and after. Robyn ended up wanting the transformation, which is fine in itself, but the way you crafted her still panicked reaction was priceless.
As for the growth, while not as methodical and descriptive of thorough clothing outgrowth you did a pretty decent job. It all depends on what outfit, how well paced is the growth, character reactions, the surrounding confining or awkward environment (i.e. theater was a good choice, packed with people), and how much clothing outgrowth can be described in great detail. I suppose that prolongs the moment. Lol. But like I said, just leading up to the OMG reaction by Robyn with the repeated creaking of the movie theater seat can at times make up for other qualities that lack.
Walk them up to the cliff's edge, then scare the daylights out of them. See if the unexpectant reader manages not to fall off over the edge. B-)