[Anotherfetishguy]

Personally I had no problem with the story, grant it I had Bonzi Buddy read it to me (if you want to criticize that may I remind you of the fact you are on a forum dedicated to impractical fetishes) and I was playing games while listening, but hey I can overlook it if I enjoy the overall content. Which was... Well, slow, really slow. Why release the first chapters when little to no shrinking is happening!? How are we supposed to be interested by the shrinking if all of it happens outside of the readers know how, you're writing a shrinking process story with jack all process, and I could forgive that if the story itself had good characters and interesting scenes to fill the gap (see Withdraw Symptoms on DeviantART) but this has bland undeveloped characters, the main character is one sided, an aspiring actress who can't get work after growing up, like a mix of every actress on Disney and Penny from Big Bang Theory, the supporting characters are just forgettable and this would all be fine if there were some good process so I could forget the problems but since you fucked up the main thing I read erotica for all I'm left with is a shitty story that looks like a script for an amateur porno!

Also how I noted the deviantART story, a FREE story with better story, I get it it's a draft but this is the base of your story and it shows nothing promising.

Also I love how I made a joke about how this forum is salty than made this long ass post LOL