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12-24-2016
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Diabolical Hugs
Join Date: Jun 2006
Location: The pacific north west
Posts: 243
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Re: New Story "Take It All In" by Clovis
Clovis!
Sorry for not giving a comment. You are doing amazing work. Your story is awesome. In this particular chapter you banished a fear that I had of Dawn turning into a replica of the gross fat that is Etna. Plus her roasting was very satisfying! I too love the depth of character you've brought to the table and the expansion description. One of the biggest questions I have is how Dawn is going to go about regular life once she's Etna size haha Plus, I'm concerned for the love triangle! If it could be called a love triangle... maybe a crush triangle? Anyway. I really like what you are doing here, and I know others like it to, regardless if they speak up or not. But I completely understand your frustration at the lack of speaking up. Do you have any other place you post your work?
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