08-04-2017 | #11 |
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Re: A Nymph Called Agnes
I'm glad the sequence doesn't linger too long over the transformation, yet still gives some process. I mean, I like detailed TFs and TGs, but I don't need 4 pages just devoted to his butt getting rounder. If the change takes too long, it takes over the story being told. Some people are ok with that, but I'm not; the transformation should serve the story, not the other way around.
I'm a bit puzzled over the reason for the transformation, though. Reinterpreting myths and such is fine - note how dragons have evolved over the years in popular fiction from destructive, greedy beasts the size of buildings to more reasonably-sized intelligent, even friendly creatures - but this seems a bit much. The whole point of nymphs is that they're beautiful womanlike beings who seduce men and have sex with them. Kind of like nondemonic succubi, I suppose. Making it so any man who gets aroused by one becomes one pretty much negates their entire role in the mythological world. In short, I would have preferred a different reason for the change. He falls in her bathing spring as he spies on her. She gives him a drink of special nectar. He says something that could be interpreted as asking for it (although he probably didn't mean it that way), or perhaps insults her somehow. Something. Not just gazing on her and getting aroused. It's reasonably well done for the scenario as portrayed, however. Short, to the point, good TG. |
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