Story: Kit's Change

[Arthax]

Here's my Thundercats transformation-fanfic, which of course I claim no ownership of in any way, as I didn't create any of the characters, objects, or anythign else, except for the storyline. I also have the utmost respect for the creators.

All characters herein are over the age of 18, and this story likewise may not be read by anyone under the age of 18.

The story includes pain and "skin-rippage", so don't read it if you hate that sort of thing.


EDIT: I plan to repost this story under a different title once I get the next chapter written, whenever that may be. I'm not currently in the writing-mood. Since the story was posted in a format that encouraged downloading and saving, hopefully it won't matter that this story is not here at this time.

[TF-Viewer]

I'm glad you decided to post it here.

[CNash]

Is there an element of age progression in this? The TF's good, but the massage that Cheetara gives Wilykit beforehand is a little too sexual in nature for a character who's depicted as a pre-teen.

[Arthax]

They're all aged appropriately, as it says at the very beginning. It also says near the beginning that this takes place several years after the crash. I thought I made it clear enough that they're _adults_, around 18 or 19, similar to what you see in the comics, which I haven't read but have seen pics of.

I don't think I can make it any clearer than that.

[CNash]

Ah, I didn't see the line before the story started. You might want to make it clearer in the story itself, though.

[Arthax]

Originally Posted by CNash

Ah, I didn't see the line before the story started. You might want to make it clearer in the story itself, though.

Well, Kit is smaller and more petite than Cheetara, and i'm saving most of the "voluptuous descriptions" for her, as she takes on a greater role later on. Kit is also kind of a ditz, which I think is part of her charm here. She becomes more of a sly minx later on.

Maybe I should have gone with Velma as a subject instead, even though the story wouldn't have been as interesting, and I don't know the characters as well.

If there's still any confusion, I could just remove the story and use different characters.

[TF-Viewer]

You don't have to remove the story. It's fine. You already pointed out that it takes place years later so they're all older. If people still don't get it, you could add another line where the ritual is first being brought up saying that she's now "of age" so she can undergo it. Or say that now that she's 18 (so there's no confusion) she can take part in it.

[Arthax]

Alright, I've added the line you've suggested, TFV.

[TF-Viewer]

Good. With that line in there I can't see how anyone could have an issue with the age anymore.

[Arthax]

Lol, good! The conversation was starting to get on my nerves, but I appreciate the advice. Can't be too careful, I suppose.

I've just added a poll, since I haven't gotten much feedback yet.

[CNash]

Heh, sorry - I got a little single-minded there and forgot to give you any feedback on the actual story!

In short, I enjoyed reading it. Skin-rip TFs aren't everyone's cup of tea, but you pulled this one off well enough. The build-up of the beast breaking free from her is better than the execution of that method in, say, "Cat People". Your usage of the characters was good also - not that you really had much of a choice, with Cheetara and Kit being the only female Thundercats (aside from the secondary ones from the later seasons that nobody save the fandom really remember, of course).

[Arthax]

Thanks for the feedback, CNash!

I kind of lost interest in the series about the time they introducted the other characters, so I don't know enough to write about them, and I also wanted to keep things simple (one reason for Snarf's trip, including the fact I hate the way he talks); so this is more of an alternate-future.