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Join Date: Jan 2006
Location: The Golden State
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Re: Jimbo's intro and a story.
An interesting story. I enjoyed the transformation sequence, and I like the fact Rick / Rebecca is prepared for the eventuality.
There are some grammar issues, but I'm intrigued. One question I would ask is, where is the conflict? What is at stake for Rick / Rebecca? I know it's not a fleshed out story, but we as human beings need something to be resolved over the course of the story or we loose interest. That being said, I wish you all the best in your future writing. |
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