It Figures(TG, SW, BE, Clothing, Inanimate, Mental)

[dreams]

nice work, I like it

[lampy]

I never liked the Artists art, but this is one of the best processes for this forum of the year. After half-way art is rushed.

[Vengeance1701]

So....is that a compliment or an insult? Not quite clear, lampy.

[lampy]

Compliment mostly, but criticism, nonetheless. I'm not sure were you see it as an insult. Critique and opinion are far away from insults as you can get.

[Mysticguy]

Generally, critique offers insight as to how the art could be done better.

[Mitchell]

Originally Posted by Very_Good_Karma

I like this! The art is okay, and carries the story, but this is the first original transformation plot I've seen in years. Other pluses:

- The characterizing bit at the beginning really helped the story hold together, and was even a little funny.

- Lots of process, duh. The whole point of coming here.

- While characters narrating their own transformation can get really awkward, the blow-by-blow here is handled well and adds to rather than subtracts from the comic.

- The big third panel on page 10 sets up the last act of the story very well and gives a nice sense of the passage of time.

- A character who intentionally seeks out a transformation rather than just being a prop.

- Happy Ending! Woo!


Some things you might want to improve on:

- The faces. In some panels, they have been drawn waaay too hastily. I understand that this is a loose drawing style, but there is a level of distortion which just looks bad. The first panels of pages 10 and 12 are major offenders.

- Eye style. The characters' pupils come and go; it seems to be attempting to convey a wink sometimes, but other times it's not clear what it means. The all-white eyes came off as a little creepy in some panels. I'd recommend working on a wider range of expressions, especially a proper wink, and making pupils consistent unless it's associated with a complete character style-shift such as chibi.

I really enjoyed seeing this, and thank you for posting it on The Process!

Just bumping this...It's a well-done critique. I like the sequence, but it seems a lot of people dislike the eyes. And not so much in this one, but definitely with Sam...Something seems off when Aakashi draws guys besides Wraith. They look too cute.

[Vengeance1701]

Yeah, Karma did a great job. If only more people decided that when they didn't like something that they would couch it in constructive terms, we'd all be better off here.