12-23-2009 | #25 | |
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Re: A moment forever (TG, AP)
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I had thought that if Karyn's true wish was just to be loved, then she needn't have grown into Yurix's perfect vision. Being rid of the memories of abuse and neglect, bonus. In a way, you could shift Karyn's perceptions of Mark into Mark's head in order to keep him straight. Still fitting punishment to have himself as an ogre in his own head, but showing Yurix's truly sorry for flying off the handle. |
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12-23-2009 | #26 | |
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Re: A moment forever (TG, AP)
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12-24-2009 | #27 | |
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Re: A moment forever (TG, AP)
*holds envelope to his head* Hmm... What makes a good story great and even more realistic?
*tears open envelope and removes paper* Quote:
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12-25-2009 | #28 |
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Re: A moment forever (TG, AP)
I did work on a quick little something yesterday. Instead of Yurix, I thought Karyn could fix things her way: use what remains of her own magic energy (from the Alchemist's Hand and the Eye of Truth) to bring back her dad as a changed person, reverting to her own age... I hadn't worked it yet, but I had thought of having Nicole become as Karyn was. Sort of a FtF change.
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12-29-2009 | #29 |
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Re: A moment forever (TG, AP)
I finally finished the story, and ended on a good note, this time. I hope this three-part story was to your liking.
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12-30-2009 | #30 |
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Re: A moment forever (TG, AP)
Very good. Dealt with the problems in a plausible way and kept a happy ending for yourself. I hope that you'll keep writing and experimenting.
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12-30-2009 | #31 |
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Re: A moment forever (TG, AP)
Thanks, and I hope I'll have a solid critic like you to help me out once in a while.
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12-31-2009 | #32 |
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Re: A moment forever (TG, AP)
Just give me a poke in a pm or my email off my website or FA.
http://dragon.furvect.com http://www.furaffinity.net/user/dragon42/ |
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