Lots of Growing to Do by praedatorius (Offsite)

somnium · 01-11-2012

I haven't done straight-up TG in a long time, so this was a real treat to write. Hopefully I'll post more chapters soon, but in the meantime enjoy the first chapter.
Manny ceaslessly torments his classmate, Betty, and as a result faces her wrath. Cliche: yes, but with much more to come!

http://praedatorius.deviantart.com/a...er-1-278909920

Chaos Echo · 01-11-2012

Alright so far... can't really tell how old they're supposed to be...

tuatha · 01-11-2012

Really enjoyed this one. The process is well paced, and although I've seen a lot of stories use clothes to foreshadow a transformation, you take it to the next level. The clothes themselves become the device by which he's transformed, squeezing his body into a new shape. Look forward to seeing where you take this!

Mr GorpThorp · 01-12-2012

Very nice, can't wait for chapter 2

frice2000 · 01-13-2012

Nicely written with some actual three dimensional characters. Anxious to see where this goes very nice work so far.

monkat · 01-14-2012

Great story, but littered with grammatical oversights and errors (? la "Luis's", or Bronie/Bronia's name change, or accidentally saying a clause twice).

A thorough proof-read would do wonders, though it's not like it is terrible right now--just not perfect.

somnium · 01-14-2012

Thanks for the heads up. The change from Bronia to Bronie was intentional, actually, but I'll take care of the other stuff.

Styerion · 01-17-2012

Kind of hoping this turns into a 'lesson learned, new friends are made' kind of story in the end.

But not before Manny gets what's coming to him/her. Got a lot of work ahead of her before she becomes a good girl.

01-11-2012	#1
somnium Fetish Writer Join Date: Mar 2006 Location: New Jersey Posts: 321	Lots of Growing to Do by praedatorius (Offsite) I haven't done straight-up TG in a long time, so this was a real treat to write. Hopefully I'll post more chapters soon, but in the meantime enjoy the first chapter. Manny ceaslessly torments his classmate, Betty, and as a result faces her wrath. Cliche: yes, but with much more to come! http://praedatorius.deviantart.com/a...er-1-278909920 __________________ She smiled. ...The fragrant breeze drifted up from the sea again. A magician wandered along the beach, but no one needed him. -Douglas Adams

01-11-2012	#2
Chaos Echo Process Disciple Join Date: Apr 2006 Posts: 1,276	Re: Lots of Growing to Do by praedatorius Alright so far... can't really tell how old they're supposed to be... __________________ http://chaosecho.deviantart.com/ Me on DeviantART. I upload my stuff over there. Pretty much dead though.

01-11-2012	#3
tuatha Prince of the Trailerpark Join Date: Jan 2010 Posts: 237	Re: Lots of Growing to Do by praedatorius Really enjoyed this one. The process is well paced, and although I've seen a lot of stories use clothes to foreshadow a transformation, you take it to the next level. The clothes themselves become the device by which he's transformed, squeezing his body into a new shape. Look forward to seeing where you take this!

01-12-2012	#4
Mr GorpThorp Frequent Poster Join Date: Jan 2006 Posts: 402	Re: Lots of Growing to Do by praedatorius Very nice, can't wait for chapter 2 __________________ Gorp. Thorp.

01-13-2012	#5
frice2000 "My way of thanking you" Join Date: Jan 2006 Posts: 401	Re: Lots of Growing to Do by praedatorius Nicely written with some actual three dimensional characters. Anxious to see where this goes very nice work so far.

01-14-2012	#6
monkat Frequent Poster Join Date: Jun 2006 Posts: 132	Re: Lots of Growing to Do by praedatorius Great story, but littered with grammatical oversights and errors (? la "Luis's", or Bronie/Bronia's name change, or accidentally saying a clause twice). A thorough proof-read would do wonders, though it's not like it is terrible right now--just not perfect.

01-17-2012	#8
Styerion Happiness in detachment Join Date: Sep 2008 Posts: 441	Re: Lots of Growing to Do by praedatorius Kind of hoping this turns into a 'lesson learned, new friends are made' kind of story in the end. But not before Manny gets what's coming to him/her. Got a lot of work ahead of her before she becomes a good girl.