My first SW story... now on the correct forum

Anotherfetishguy · 12-18-2017

I finally decided to make something from scratch instead of editing another persons story. As you can expect, its.... less than stellar to say the least. I didn't believe it was worthy to be on here so it was on the F&B forum for awhile, but I got some good feedback so I assumed why not post it here? Besides you know, the obvious reasons...

Well I only kinda started from scratch, its an interactive story about characters from Fate/Zero shrinking. I chose Saber (duh) so obviously the characters are not mine, but the actual story is.

Please rate how bad I fucked up in the poll.

Chapters I made (the blank ones you can write if you want)
https://www.writing.com/main/interac...ive/map/114221
https://www.writing.com/main/interac...ve/map/1142211
https://www.writing.com/main/interac...e/map/11422112
https://www.writing.com/main/interac.../map/114221122
https://www.writing.com/main/interac...map/1142211222

Tiedefender · 12-19-2017

I thought it was okay. However, I know nothing about Fate Zero.

The biggest problem I had was with writing.com. Most of the time it gets to overloaded with traffic.

Other than that it has the same problem as my story. That is introducing the characters to people who don't know them.

Anotherfetishguy · 12-20-2017

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Originally Posted by Tiedefender

I thought it was okay. However, I know nothing about Fate Zero.

The biggest problem I had was with writing.com. Most of the time it gets to overloaded with traffic.

Other than that it has the same problem as my story. That is introducing the characters to people who don't know them.

Yeah I kind of took the fanfiction approach of assuming the reader already knows the characters. I forgot that most people are not filthy weebs like I am. In the future if I ever actually write again I'll introduce the characters.

View Poll Results: How terrible was this?
1 - Not bad at all!	3	37.50%
2 - It was okay...	2	25.00%
3 - Not bad for a rough dra- wait this is the final product?	0	0%
4 - Writing may not be your thing...	0	0%
5 - I've read Sonic foot fetish stories on DeviantArt that had better writing than this.	3	37.50%
Voters: 8. You may not vote on this poll

12-18-2017	#1
Anotherfetishguy أنا رجل مضحك Join Date: Mar 2016 Posts: 568	My first SW story... now on the correct forum I finally decided to make something from scratch instead of editing another persons story. As you can expect, its.... less than stellar to say the least. I didn't believe it was worthy to be on here so it was on the F&B forum for awhile, but I got some good feedback so I assumed why not post it here? Besides you know, the obvious reasons... Well I only kinda started from scratch, its an interactive story about characters from Fate/Zero shrinking. I chose Saber (duh) so obviously the characters are not mine, but the actual story is. Please rate how bad I fucked up in the poll. Chapters I made (the blank ones you can write if you want) https://www.writing.com/main/interac...ive/map/114221 https://www.writing.com/main/interac...ve/map/1142211 https://www.writing.com/main/interac...e/map/11422112 https://www.writing.com/main/interac.../map/114221122 https://www.writing.com/main/interac...map/1142211222 __________________ Last edited by Anotherfetishguy; 12-18-2017 at 04:36 PM.

12-19-2017	#2
Tiedefender Process Master Join Date: May 2016 Location: USA Posts: 592	Re: My first SW story... now on the correct forum I thought it was okay. However, I know nothing about Fate Zero. The biggest problem I had was with writing.com. Most of the time it gets to overloaded with traffic. Other than that it has the same problem as my story. That is introducing the characters to people who don't know them.