Midna BE Story

[Daichi Azure]

dun dun duhhhh! this is going to be interesting...

[cyero]

It was me! Thank me for heralding this new chapter! o:

I already forgot what the babies looked like, it's been a while since I played MM. -curses Gyorg once more-

[Daichi Azure]

nice...this will be nice when he continues it

I wish I could read your critique...
But I can't, and it's someone's fault for using words I don't want on pages I visit.
I'll just continue this as I did, if you guys are OK with that. If not... send a message or something.

[Daichi Azure]

keep going man...it's a good story...

[Daichi Azure]

Originally Posted by cyero

It was me! Thank me for heralding this new chapter! o:

I already forgot what the babies looked like, it's been a while since I played MM. -curses Gyorg once more-

they were tadpoles...

[Daichi Azure]

-pokes some more- Wonder what's going to happen to Lulu...

Guys, it's really annoying that I cannot read your comments- and that's why this project is paused. Any notes I should make? This is your last chance to influence the story- please send me a PM with the critique people gave. If I don't get anything, I'll just continue without any critique.

Okay, here's the next piece:

'' Lulu almost forgot the time while caring for her babies, when she realized the concert would be in half an hour. She jumped up, and stood in front of her mirror. She sang a few notes. She was so experienced in the singing field, she could sing beautifully along to most anything. She practised until the concert would begin in five minutes. She left her room and went on stage ( it was really close to her room ). All the other band members were playing some notes on their instruments and greeted her with a smile.

Many Zora?s ( and some humans ) had come to see the band, and especially to hear Lulu?s famous voice. The band?s leader held a short speech, and the band began. The first minutes the music was soft and sad ( and Lulu sang along beautifully ), but after a while it became triumphant as though the music told a story of a sad beginning but a good ending. After the concert ended with a joyful solo by Lulu, the audience gave them a loud applause. All band members started wandering back to their rooms, including Lulu.

Her forehead was covered in sweat and she was really thirsty. She hadn?t eaten all day long and had barely had any water. She went back in her room and saw her babies in the bath. ?? That water?s salt, I can?t drink that...??, she said to herself. She noticed the bottle of milk on her shelf. She hardly remembered where it came from, but she opened it and smelled to see if the milk was still of good quality. It was, according to the smell, and she tasted a bit. It was goat?s milk, and not that tasty in her opinion, but her thirst was stronger.

In one large gulp she drained the entire bottle. Her thirst was quenched, and now she was really sleepy. She gently lay herself in the water beside her little babies who were already asleep. She, too, fell asleep almost instantly. It was not until late in the morning the next day that she woke up, feeling a bit heavier. She stood up and looked at herself. ?? Am I imagining or did my breasts get a little bigger???, she asked herself. She moved her breasts with her hands. They sloshed a bit.

?? Maybe it?s because I regularly give milk to my children???, she thought up as a possible conclusion. Her beautiful dress, which normally hung loosely around her chest now was a slight bit tighter. She attended to her children for the further time, and didn?t waste any more thought on larger bust size. When her children were once again in deep sleep, she quietly went out and dived into the large pool in the center of the room. Just like yesterday, she wanted to go around the Great Bay once.

She was in thought when suddenly she bumped into a disgusting creature under the water. It was a Like-Like, an enormous leech that swallows humans or Zoras. She quickly jumped backwards and held her hands in front of her, and shot the fins of her harms at the disgusting creature to paralyse it. As soon as she had paralysed the creature, she slashed it with her fins wherever she could until it didn?t move any more. She sighed deeply, and looked at the dead creature on the floor. From that angle, she could also see her larger breasts.

?? Are they bigger than they were this morning?!??, she said out loud ( no one could hear her in the water, except for the Zoras and they were all sleeping in the Zora Hall. ). ?? If this keeps going on, I?ll have to ask the professor of the Great Bay for his advice...??, she wondered. She finished her trip around the Great Bay, and still a bit in shock, went back to the Zora Hall. Her dress fit remarkably tightly around her chest. She ran to her room, so no one would notice anything ( though hardly anyone had gotten out of bed ).

Her heart beat faster than normally, she noticed, as she gently sat down in the small pool. She pondered all that had happened, when suddenly her seven babies woke up. They needed all her attention, so there was no more time for pondering and worrying.''


Guys, in two days I'll go on vacation and that means no story- please be patient, ok?

[cyero]

Nice, although Zoras have no nipples and so can not give milk.

Anyway, nice addition. The random appearence of the Like-Like was nice. -shudders at LikeLikes-

[Daichi Azure]

alright, nice addition to the story...

Originally Posted by cyero

Nice, although Zoras have no nipples and so can not give milk.

Anyway, nice addition. The random appearence of the Like-Like was nice. -shudders at LikeLikes-

Actually, that's not necessarily true. If Nintendo would depict nipples, the game would be 18 + and that's not really what they wanted with Ocarina of Time and Majora's Mask.
But even if it is true, this is just something I thought up then ( am I really that weird? ).

I thought I'd add some action. I mean, if a story is solely BE that's not really artistic. I'm practising my writing skills, see.

And thanks a lot!