12-16-2008 | #13 |
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Re: Trouble Before Twilight
That makes me feel a lot better. I was afraid that she was pitied too much from the way I presented her.
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12-17-2008 | #14 |
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Re: Trouble Before Twilight
Uh! I feel sorry for all the girls in the purse!
I wonder why Gwen didn't put Casey in her purse like the other girls. Well, it gives the story for tension for sure. Now, I really want to know how this story ends. Captain Ash
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[Edit] I totally blew this response. For some reason I thought you were talking about Wendy. Casey's fate was due to the very careless and spiteful way that Gwen delt with the situation. I can imagine her running after the shrinking vehicle and purposefully stomping on it just to stop her escape. I'll give you a hint. Jen brought one of Ryan's failed experiments I mentioned in 'A Day in The Life' with her. Last edited by LOD; 02-15-2009 at 12:51 PM. Reason: I screwed up |
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02-15-2009 | #16 |
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Re: Trouble Before Twilight
Thanks to the suggestions from other writers like Wussy and Illun I have rewritten the purse scene in Trouble Before Twilight pt2. (Posted above)
I hope you guys think that it's better suited for the way the story has been progressing. |
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