Midna BE Story

[Sir Kibble]

Well, as I see it, the story wouldn't be as interesting if Midna was in human(ish) form. Plus the plot wouldn't work since in any Zelda story you just HAVE to have Link, and we assume the two don't meet again after Midna goes into the Twilight Realm.
But, meh...

Originally Posted by crazyazn

AUGHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!!11

Im sorry but midna the imp? not midna the hottie?
This is so bad (in terms of character choice not writing) that I think got cancer.

Whoa- you know, I did not ask you to read the story, nor to give it rather unfair critique. Also, don't lightly make jokes about cancer, okay? Some people take heavy offence from that.

Anyway, thanks everyone else.

Actually, I have decided to listen to you guys, and what you want next in the story. Of course, I want to keep it fairly normal, for as far as this is possible with a BE story.

[kingnitros]

Originally Posted by crazyazn

AUGHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!!11

Im sorry but midna the imp? not midna the hottie?
This is so bad (in terms of character choice not writing) that I think got cancer.

aww, I disagree, I think she's cuter as a little... thing.. than in her human form, but her human form is hot, I still like her imp form better.

[Huzzus]

Originally Posted by kingnitros

aww, I disagree, I think she's cuter as a little... thing.. than in her human form, but her human form is hot, I still like her imp form better.

DMN!!!! w00t ^^

You have gaven I, Huzzus, the power to post. While the story and idea itself is rather nice, the writing skills need a "little" improvement. I, Huzzus, am not hating it and it's a very nice story and you actually are bold enough to skip through the dungeon part which is welcomed XD. 4 out of 5

Originally Posted by Huzzus

DMN!!!! w00t ^^

You have gaven I, Huzzus, the power to post. While the story and idea itself is rather nice, the writing skills need a "little" improvement. I, Huzzus, am not hating it and it's a very nice story and you actually are bold enough to skip through the dungeon part which is welcomed XD. 4 out of 5

Okay . Thank you for your comment. Maybe you could give me some advice on how to improve the writing skills?

I did write a small bit more, but I may change it if you guys dislike it. After this piece I planned to skip to Midna's true form- provided you want it.

'' As soon as Link and Midna left the Twilight Realm, Midna warped Link to the Hyrule Castle Town. Link was about to enter, when Midna noticed another disbalance. She put her hands on her buttocks. Was she going crazy, or were they becoming bigger as well? This curse was causing her an awful lot of trouble... she decided not to speak of this with Link as well, she had already disturbed him with her problems numerous times.

Link hasted towards the Castle, and Midna then used the Fused Shadows to destroy the barrier on Hyrule Castle. The entered a huge castle, and the search for keys and the like began again. Midna had decided not to hide in Link?s shadow any more. She couldn?t help but feel dreadful, because she felt how her breasts slowly, but unstoppably grew- and apparently, it seemed to affect her buttocks a bit too. But this seemed insignificant in comparison.

Link had just entered the castle itself after obtaining the key, when Midna asked Link for a moment?s pause. She weighed her breasts on her hands again. They were definately somewhat heavier then they had been in the Palace of Twilight. She put her hands on her buttocks. They did stick out a bit more then they had done, and were a bit wider too. She sighed deeply, wondering if this would become a lot worse.

Link gave her a worried look. He understood that she had to endure a lot, and he forced himself to make as much haste as he could. When he had gotten his hands on the boss key, he had to take a short break. Midna understood, and she was grateful for his haste, but she couldn?t help constantly checking the size of her breasts. After a minute, Link ran off again. He hardly had time to be scared of the ghosts, and simply ran on.

It didn?t even take that much time before he actually reached the huge boss door. He unlocked it and walked in. Ganondorf welcomed them, and walked towards them. ?? You people have l...??, he started, and then suddenly stopped in awe as he took a good look at Midna. ?? I see Zant didn?t do exactly what I told him to do.??, he said. Though she had been stared at numerous times now, Midna turned a bit red again.

?? He used an old spell, and something went wrong. Now, tell me, how do I lift this curse?!??, Midna said. Ganondorf laughed. ?? I have no idea, but you can?t lift it by destroying me, if that?s what you intended.?? Midna was now completely confused. Ganon continued his undoubtedly practised speech, until he came to the point where he posessed Zelda and Link had to defeat him.

This, which probably doesn?t surprise anyone, was achieved rather easily, and Midna, using the Fused Shadows banished Ganondorf from Zelda?s body. Zelda was saved but she wasn?t so surprised at Midna?s change, as their hearts had been like one. But Ganon was not defeated yet and Midna transformed once more to destroy him, after teleporting the unwilling Link and Zelda away.

Link and Zelda witnessed the destruction of Hyrule Castle and saw how Ganondorf had apparently killed Midna; he held her Fused Shadow in his hand and broke it. Another epic battle followed involving light arrows, a horse and a sword. But eventually, the evil Ganondorf was destroyed, and Link saw a figure appear in the distance which he identified as Midna, and ran towards her...''

[slasherkiller]

wow . did somebody will done a pic of this

[BrainDead]

Very nice

[wandering_spirit]

I don't know if it's just me, but it feels like the last two parts were rushed.

[Grim]

i think it might be better u you went thru what u have written and kinda, go over the stuff that leaves those who have not played this particular game completly in the dark.

maybe after you continue, i wanna see where this goes

[SoylentOrange]

Could definitely use a rewrite, yes. Story's fine, just clean it up and pad out the rushed areas.

Originally Posted by Grim

i think it might be better u you went thru what u have written and kinda, go over the stuff that leaves those who have not played this particular game completly in the dark.

maybe after you continue, i wanna see where this goes

Originally Posted by SoylentOrange

Could definitely use a rewrite, yes. Story's fine, just clean it up and pad out the rushed areas.

Hm. I rushed through temples and such on purpose, because it mostly does not handle the difference between this story and what happens in his games.

I'm rather busy, but I will rewrite those parts at a certain point.

Maybe anyone could give me some more advice on how, though?

[SoylentOrange]

Well, honestly I don't really see a need to go through the dungeons like you would in the game, but they are a bit *too* rushed. Just a couple sentances describing link's trials and triumphs for each would be helpful.