A Costume Party (Complete) - Page 3

julby · 03-31-2009

Thanks, transformative (and others)!

To Damn Lucky: Technically they weren't attacked by Loki's costumes, they were just bitten by a costume-vampire.

Xodiac · 04-01-2009

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Wow...for some reason I never actually cognitized that there was only ONE actual TG transformation in the story (unless you count the robot). I guess I'm used to thinking of CD, feminization (of either gender) and TG as interchangeable, but for most people they certainly aren't.

Well, There was the wedding planner into a priest, with was F2M TG. And there was a troupe of young boys into ballerinas. Neither was exactly lingered over, but they do count as TGs. Still, yeah, this techincally belongs more in the TF subforum. Which doesn't mean I like it any less, mind!

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Anyway, the initial storyboard idea had the robot being the time-traveller who prevents it from happening, but I thought "some fifth character saves the day" was slightly less of a cheat ending than "he could have time travelled this whole time but didn't think about it."

If you make the guy who does the time thing not so much an uberfan, it'd make sense that he not think of it, though. Not immediately, anyway. It'd also give you a reason to get him out from in front of the TV set. Make him more like the girl, who was a big fan as a kid but has grown out of it, other than plenty of fond memories.

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I don't want to overhaul the story at this point because I've already invested about as much time as I'm interested in investing into the initial writing, so here's what I'm going to try: Having some brief scene in the middle of the story that involves Ron sitting at home watching the time-travel episode (or something like that with Ron). That way there's a bit of foreshadowing and the ending is less of a "and then I pulled this out of my ass" ending. Thoughts?

I did like how you foreshadowed the time-traveling. That was well done. Too many authors would either pull that ability out of nowhere or would hammer it home to the reader, bringing too much attention to it and making it an obvious solution. This was great.

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Edit: Also, Xodiac makes a very good point...but I worry that if I try answering it, either within the story or outside it, I'll be guilty of taking a story about Norse gods transforming costumed people into vampires and vampires transforming people into cross-dressing vampire slaves too seriously.

To me, all you have to say is that this will cause chaos, not to mention people becoming permanently what they thought would be only temporary, or didn't want at all. End of the world, no, but not exactly conducive to mental health - not to mention the possible breakdown of society as the world at large is forced to realize magic exists.

Anyway, I certainly understand how you're reluctant to go back and do more rewrites. I tell you these ideas as something to consider for the future, then.

Rollsumi · 04-01-2009

Mind controlled cheerleaders sounds like an awesome movie idea...

julby · 04-01-2009

So after enjoying reading the great feedback you guys have been leaving for the past few days, I've decided to at least try to write a sequel.

I wrote an outline for it last night. It involves all of the same characters (along with several new ones) and takes place two years after "A Costume Party." The working title is "A College Party," and it will have a much stronger TG focus.

The-Pro · 04-01-2009

Huzzah!

transformative · 04-01-2009

I <3 you...
(cheerleaders?)

Damn_Lucky · 04-01-2009

Only one thing to say realy.

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Originally Posted by transformative

I <3 you..

(Gothic Gibblies? =3 )

julby · 04-01-2009

No comment (yet).

Spacix · 04-02-2009

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Originally Posted by The-Pro

There is nothing that can't be improved by adding more cheerleaders.

How does this fix having TOO many cheerleaders?

The-Pro · 04-02-2009

...too many cheerleaders?

You're speaking insanity.

transformative · 04-03-2009

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Originally Posted by Spacix

How does this fix having TOO many cheerleaders?

can those three words be used in the same sentence?

Rollsumi · 04-03-2009

Hmm...CHEERLEADER VS GOTH CHEERLEADER WAR!

03-31-2009	#25
julby Lurker Join Date: Nov 2008 Posts: 26	Re: A Costume Party Thanks, transformative (and others)! To Damn Lucky: Technically they weren't attacked by Loki's costumes, they were just bitten by a costume-vampire.

04-01-2009	#27
Rollsumi Cat Boy Join Date: Jun 2008 Posts: 5,354	Re: A Costume Party Mind controlled cheerleaders sounds like an awesome movie idea... __________________ You're friendly neighborhood Sumi!

04-01-2009	#28
julby Lurker Join Date: Nov 2008 Posts: 26	Re: A Costume Party So after enjoying reading the great feedback you guys have been leaving for the past few days, I've decided to at least try to write a sequel. I wrote an outline for it last night. It involves all of the same characters (along with several new ones) and takes place two years after "A Costume Party." The working title is "A College Party," and it will have a much stronger TG focus.

04-01-2009	#29
The-Pro Frequent Poster Join Date: Aug 2007 Posts: 326	Re: A Costume Party Huzzah!

04-01-2009	#30
transformative skrew ball Join Date: Jun 2006 Posts: 870	Re: A Costume Party I <3 you... (cheerleaders?) __________________ mah DA faves

04-01-2009	#32
julby Lurker Join Date: Nov 2008 Posts: 26	Re: A Costume Party No comment (yet).

04-02-2009	#34
The-Pro Frequent Poster Join Date: Aug 2007 Posts: 326	Re: A Costume Party ...too many cheerleaders? You're speaking insanity.

04-03-2009	#36
Rollsumi Cat Boy Join Date: Jun 2008 Posts: 5,354	Re: A Costume Party Hmm...CHEERLEADER VS GOTH CHEERLEADER WAR! __________________ You're friendly neighborhood Sumi!