Wishes released (Weight loss, IB, FtF, TG)

wandering_spirit · 01-21-2010

I worked up a story today, since the day was really boring at work. I decided to work on an idea I asked in a request, and finally ended up doing... again.

Vengeance1701 · 01-21-2010

I thought that was a great story, to be honest

And it's stupid it's not getting more comments!

johnsmith · 01-21-2010

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Originally Posted by wandering_spirit

I worked up a story today, since the day was really boring at work. I decided to work on an idea I asked in a request, and finally ended up doing... again.

great,great story. wish the genies transformation was a little slower. It started out great then it seems it got a little rushed but it was a great read.

wandering_spirit · 01-22-2010

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Originally Posted by johnsmith

great,great story. wish the genies transformation was a little slower. It started out great then it seems it got a little rushed but it was a great read.

First time doing a Shrink/Weight loss process. I'm trying to cram different process styles into my story types, like I did with my previous, three-part piece called 'A moment... forever', which had AP, TG, Mental Change, AR and FtF.

johnsmith · 01-22-2010

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Originally Posted by wandering_spirit

First time doing a Shrink/Weight loss process. I'm trying to cram different process styles into my story types, like I did with my previous, three-part piece called 'A moment... forever', which had AP, TG, Mental Change, AR and FtF.

I just would've liked to see more process w/the Genie. I like seeing it Dragged out. I thought it was going that way..till he went to bed and the genie transformed fast

Just my opinion though

wandering_spirit · 01-22-2010

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Originally Posted by johnsmith

I just would've liked to see more process w/the Genie. I like seeing it Dragged out. I thought it was going that way..till he went to bed and the genie transformed fast

Just my opinion though

Think of it as a surprise for the main character. Essentially, he made a wish while she was away, so he wouldn't have seen the change. It's the same reason why I didn't type down that last wish.

01-21-2010	#2
Vengeance1701 Modest Moderator Join Date: Aug 2006 Posts: 3,998	Re: Wishes released (Weight loss, IB, FtF, TG) I thought that was a great story, to be honest And it's stupid it's not getting more comments! __________________ Meh. Cranky and old.