"Alt" Comic

[Candide]

Hey all, just wanted to show you a preview of a new comic I'm working on for TFVid.com. It starts out with a TG sequence (which lasts a few pages more than I'm posting here), and then features some BE and "beautification".

Comments appreciated as always!

Edit: Oh, and this one's likely to be completed, as it's less than 1/3 the resolution of "The Tale of Io" and uncolored.

[Wedge]

The comic is looking great Candide

[Nihtgenga]

Nice work. One small criticism is that the dude getting TGed looks very androgynous to begin with. In fact, I thought it was a girl with very small breasts.

[Reif]

I will echo what has already been said..your art style is good and this looks very promising...but...

Constructive critiscm

Aside from the obvious crotch region your starting character is very androgynous.

The tapering pointed chin on a curved jawline is the classic "manga/anime" female shape and your character already has one in the first panel.

Additionally, in terms of overall frame and body structure, the character could easily pass for a slightly stocky girl from pretty much panel #1. Remember the average woman only has 2/3 of the upper body mass of the average man and 3/4 of the lower body mass.

If youre going to keep going with a mangaesque style you might be able to make noticeable changes to the character as manga style girls allow for a bit more stylisation, but if you stay in the more realistic style or a realistic/manga fusion you really haven't allowed yourself much room to work without turning the lead into a stick figure with boobs.

That said, do what ever your vision feels is the right way to do it. If you want more examples of what I'm talking about check out the link below.

http://what-i-do-is-secret.deviantar...art-1-59174555

[Candide]

I was trying to make him look younger, not effeminate. (For the record, the character is not a minor--he just *looks* young. Young and androgynous.) Ah well! I hope any confusion about his initial gender is dispelled by the second page. I'll definitely consider going back and correcting at least his facial features after I finish the rest of the comic.

Any thoughts on what should happen once she's done developing? A potion of giant growth? Transformation into cat form?

[Nihtgenga]

Yeah, I realised my mistake when I saw the crotch.

It's mainly the face in panel 1 that makes him look so girly, but also there's the chest. Especially in panel 2 (In panel 1 too mut not as much) it looks like he already has breasts to me. Must be wearing a tight shirt, eh?

[Snowglare]

Yeah, I was sure he'd started sprouting breasts in panel 2 until I got to the text in panel 4 and realized his transformation couldn't have started yet.

[Gobosan1]

i would like to demand moar, not just moar boobehs, but moar comic
kupo

[Goldendawn]

I for one really like it - I really can't draw to save myself, so seeing someone draw well always impresses me But it looks good so far, and certainly would like to see more of this comic...

Thanks for sharing.

[Cadell]

Why is it that I find myself agreeing with Gobosan 1 all the time?

[Gobosan1]

Originally Posted by Cadell

Why is it that I find myself agreeing with Gobosan 1 all the time?

because i am never right and you're a moron
kupo
either that or i'm psychic and i'm fucking with you
kupo

[transformative]

Originally Posted by Gobosan1

i'm psychic and i'm fucking with you
kupo

ahhhhh one of my favorite activities... screwing with peoples heads... *evil grin*