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Re: Transcendence (Growth Spurts, BE, Hourglass, Gentle, Omni)
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Originally Posted by Kitran
That's why I can't write stories anymore. I get off on tangents and often deviate from the main plot line.  BTW, you briefly switched from the 1st person perspective to the 2nd person perspective when you wrote ' "Aww, they're adorable there, Felix" Claudia started looking at you.' Should've been 'looking at me'. Otherwise not bad. |
Fixed  , ty . Well, I'm actually liking that im deviating here and there. Because I like to write a long story, not a shorty..
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