Incubusted (Complete)

[GearRyu]

Thank you all for the incoming views (and over 1000 reads! Woah! Mind-boggling! O.o)

And now to address your criticism...
as jon said, he prefers the BE content. Although the story is primarly focused on the result of the TG, the BE already in place will have an appreciable result in the beginning of the 2nd chapter and a new "problem" (BE-related) will be in place by the end of said chapter.

As SkruLuce stated, a lot of TG/BE stories involve heavy amounts of sex. For me, sexual content is of secondary (or less) importance to good story. You may note that despite the story already involving a boy TGed into a girl with BE, his best friend right there, and an incubus involved, there has been no sexual activity beyond various forms of foreplay and innuendo. All intentional. I actually have an explanation for Drazzmik's handling of the situation, which will be first explored throughout the 2nd chapter. To paraphrase Stephen King, you read a story for the journey, not the ending. The best is yet to come.

I think the third chapter is the one I am most looking forward to scripting. I have a tentative idea of how the latter half of the 4th chapter, and the final chapter, will play out.

By the way, part of my new plan is to revise each preceding chapter when I script a new chapter. You will find some of your criticism thrown into the revisions. Therefore, each time I represent a chapter, it will be a more enjoyable read.

About half way to 2/3 through the first draft of the 2nd chapter. Seven pages and growing (no pun intended ;-) ).

By the way, approximately what cup-size is Naga, from Slayers? "Why?" you ask. You will find out later. It has relevancy.