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08-27-2011
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Process Disciple
Join Date: May 2005
Posts: 4,920
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Re: Dungeon & Dragons & Expansion (BE, TF, MB, FMG)
Well, again, Celia's TF is supposed to be a little gross, that was kind of her point, to be the bottom of the well in both mental and physical horror. Though I have to admit I find it funny that you single out Jillian's mind control when Rena had- in my opinion- the far scarier and more drastic mental changes.
And how do you mean with the outfits? I thought they were rather plain, myself... |
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08-29-2011
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Frosty!
Join Date: Nov 2006
Posts: 197
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Re: Dungeon & Dragons & Expansion (BE, TF, MB, FMG)
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Also, Rena's mental change was far more drastic, but there wasn't really awareness of it, or a response to it on her part. She didn't have a moment of realization really. I liked Jillian's bit about "Oh, what a mess" and "I'm sure I could think straight if I wasn't so hungry." It illustrates maybe an awareness of her change. Or stuff like her yelling at Celia to do stuff indicates sort of that she's till *her*, she's just changed. I dunno, it was just something that I liked! I am not big on the goo stuff either, so on the other side, that scene was a mixed bag for my personal tastes, but it was well done either way. You do very well, and are certainly head and heels over a lot of folks who try their hand at this. So I guess that is encouragement. On a side note, I played a Transformation/MC themed D&D game not too long ago with some people over at the Garden. It didn't last very long (scheduling and such was hard) but it was a blast, and this reminded me of that.
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09-07-2011
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Leecher
Join Date: Dec 2007
Posts: 2
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Re: Dungeon & Dragons & Expansion (BE, TF, MB, FMG)
Beautiful story man, i hope you write more
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