Jimbo's intro and a story.

Hardcase · 10-26-2013

An interesting story. I enjoyed the transformation sequence, and I like the fact Rick / Rebecca is prepared for the eventuality.

There are some grammar issues, but I'm intrigued. One question I would ask is, where is the conflict? What is at stake for Rick / Rebecca?

I know it's not a fleshed out story, but we as human beings need something to be resolved over the course of the story or we loose interest.

That being said, I wish you all the best in your future writing.

Jimbo · 07-25-2014

so yeah still working on my story, its going well but I keep getting writers block, so did a lot of research and profiles for a my cast.

also did few illustrations

and asked Grumpy tg if he'd mind doing me a cover page when he's not so busy.

anyways wish me luck. also some ideas might help.

10-26-2013	#1
Hardcase Frequent Poster Join Date: Jan 2006 Location: The Golden State Posts: 207	Re: Jimbo's intro and a story. An interesting story. I enjoyed the transformation sequence, and I like the fact Rick / Rebecca is prepared for the eventuality. There are some grammar issues, but I'm intrigued. One question I would ask is, where is the conflict? What is at stake for Rick / Rebecca? I know it's not a fleshed out story, but we as human beings need something to be resolved over the course of the story or we loose interest. That being said, I wish you all the best in your future writing.

07-25-2014	#2
Jimbo Selfish lurker TF artist Join Date: Sep 2013 Location: Scotland Posts: 495	Re: Jimbo's intro and a story. so yeah still working on my story, its going well but I keep getting writers block, so did a lot of research and profiles for a my cast. also did few illustrations and asked Grumpy tg if he'd mind doing me a cover page when he's not so busy. anyways wish me luck. also some ideas might help.